Last night at Petay’s Restaurant, I sat with Ahmed Nadeem to discuss his comments on the short film screenplay EMME MANZAREH which I wrote and was based on a short story he published of the same name on Haveeru online two years ago.
Though he had many comments, he really loved the screenplay especially the wickedest twist which was nonexistent from his original story. He too thought it was very twisted.
Most of his feedback was on the visual look, the mood and the style which I thought changing would enrich the screenplay thus making the film darker and adding more depth to the twisted ending. He even referred me a movie to watch to understand the kind of visual style he’s talking about. So before I start re-writing I’m going to watch this movie.
The other comment he made was on some of the dialogues used for the central character. He wanted to make it stronger. I agreed on changing some while I disagreed on changing them entirely. I felt the audience would get offended since using strong language in films is still considered a bit taboo. We need to come out of this shell slowly I thought.
He was very excited when I said soon after I updated my Facebook status that I completed writing the screenplay, Dark Rain Entertainment (DRE) honcho, Mohamed Ali Moger replied me requesting for a read. I have already mailed him a soft copy of the screenplay which he will read as soon as he recovers from the flu he’s having presently. It’s difficult to continue typing this post as my fingers have been crossed since his message.
I type off for now and will return with more updates, hopefully without crossed fingers.